C4C (Project #5)

C4C #13 (Last One)
Student: Anna Kern
http://kernannaedm310.blogspot.com/

Hey! your blog looks great, all of your pictures have links and your links within your blogs are working. Great job! I only saw one tiny mistake, other than this, great job!

You Said:
We all remember being little and wanting to do the things we thought would be fun such as being an artist or an astronaut.As Mr. Koyczan said, despite all we dreamed about or aspired to be, we were told to think about things more realistic.
(*There should be a space after astronaut and As.)


C4C #12
Student: Jacquelyn's Blog
Hi! Your blog looks flawless, I have proofread this blog and I did not find any mistakes. All of your links are working and you have added titles and pictures. keep up the good work!

C4C#11
Student Name & Link: Jordan Neely
HI, Jordan your blog looks really good, it is organized very well and everything is easy  to see. I noticed you have pictures in every post and it really does make your post stand out. The links are also working on each of your pictures, good job. You also incorporated links into each post that will directly take you to each article.

I did find some mistakes within your blog post #11:
You Said:
They know the rules for commenting and to not say means things in comments because it could hurt their classmate’s feelings.
*Instead of "means" it should be "mean"

This sentence doesn't flow very well:
This classroom has Nintendo DS’s as well with educational games on them, too.
*Try this:
*Mrs. Cassidy's classroom is equipped with Nintendo DS, which is a hand held gaming device that contains educational games.

C4C#10
Student Name & Link to Blog: Brylyn Cowling

Your blog looks great, your picture has the correct HTML code when you hover the mouse over it and your links are working.

I am not positive but I am pretty sure you need a comma in this sentence:
*Randy Pausch was a professor at Carnegie Mellon University who battled pancreatic cancer and is famously known for his inspirational lecture, The Last Lecture.
>>(If the highlighter does not show up I placed a comma after the lecture, The Last Lecture)

*When he stated this, I immediately thought of scenarios in my future classroom that this could apply to: What if I teach in an area where funds are lacking and the tools I would like to use in my classroom are limited?

This sentence is a little broken up, you could rephrase it like this:
>>While Randy spoke, I immediately though of...

 *From this segment I learned that it is important to make the most out of each and every opportunity and situation I am given in my career as a professional educator.
*You should say something that flows better:
>>While listening to this segment I learned:


C4C #9
Student: Briann Smith
Blog Link: Briann's Blog Post

Below are some tips to incorporate into this blog post, also the post is very lengthy. Maybe condensing the next post would be a way to entice the reader to keep reading. Other than that it looks really good, your pictures and videos are working perfectly. Keep up the good work.

This was a colaberative post, they wrote:
He described at “risk students” as students of poverty
*This should be: He describes at "risk students" as students of poverty.

They wrote:
What city do you live?, What state do you live in?, What country do you live in?, and What is your address?

*I am not positive but I do not think you need these commas. The ? mark should be the end of the sentence the commas don't really make sense. You should just list the questions and leave the commas out.

They wrote:
In his presentation he went on to ask, “why is there such a disconnect for these kids”.


*There should be a ? mark after kids?"
Example: "Why is there such a disconnection for these kids?".

They wrote:
Crosby stressed how important it is to help students who have not had many experiences and inputs to build a schema of the world.

Crosby stresses how important it is to help build a schema or knowledge of the world these children live in. Since they are poverty students, they do not have worldly experiences other students may have.
*This breaks the sentence up and makes it more understandable.



C4C #8
Student: Amanda Weller
Link:Amanda Weller's Blog
She Wrote:
After we leave EDM310 we will have to figure out where to start to learn how to use new tools that will become available in great numbers in the future.

I think this can be said better, it is confusing. You should say something like this:
*When we leave EDM310 and we are teaching in the 21st century, we will need to know how to use new technological tools to become more affective teachers.

I like the idea of having a social network poster made from "Glogster". The students will love this because you can share it and incorporate their work into their own social lives. This is a great tool I never knew existed. I will definitely be using this in my future classroom, thanks for the idea.




C4C #7
Students Name: Krista Rodden
 Link to Blog: Krista Rodden
The video was very exciting and kept my attention. The background music was perfect, it made the book come to life! Your organization of your pictures and captions from the book were very impressive, and well thought through.
The only thing I noticed was that your in between sentences were weak.
You said: And refuses more but Sam keeps trying.
You could have said something like: After Sam's friends dismiss the Green Eggs and Ham, Sam persist they try it.

C4C #6
Students Name: Hilliary Sanders
Link to blog: Hilliary Sander's Blog
She Wrote:
"However, a very simple way is to ask questions."
*You need to explain what you are trying to say a little better, you should add something to justify this sentence.
Example: "However, a very simple way to discover if your students are comprehending what you are teaching is to ask questions.
She Wrote:
I'm sure at some point we have all seen the scene "Bueller...Bueller...Bueller" from the movie Farris Bueller's Day Off.
*(I love this movie! This was a great example to put in your blog it made me laugh!)

You have great word placement and your sentences are very precise and to the point. Also all of your links work and your pictures are linked correctly. Great Job! Keep up the good work.


C4C #5
Students name: Lisa Smith
Link to blog:Lisa's Blog
She said:
"Gives students a personal learning experiences."
It should say: "Gives students a tremendous amount of learning experiences."
(..or simply just make experiences into experience.)
The assignment was to make a presentation about both ICurio and Discovery Ed, I do not see anything related to Discovery Ed.
I loved the style of your prezi, the different slide changes kept my attention.

C4C #4
Students Link: Ashley Railey
Ashley Wrote:
And if you missed school because of an illness or family emergency, you feel behind in your work.
*(Feel should be changed to fell) (Also I wouldn't start this sentence with And..)

Ashley Wrote:
Fast forward to 2013.
*(I get what your trying to say, but this sentence needs more depth..)
Example: If you will fast forward to the year 2013, our educational systems have been modified and upgraded drastically.

Ashley Wrote:
How amazing is that!
*(Again you need more depth.)

Also your picture does not have a link when your mouse is hovered over it, if you need you can look in the class blog and its shows you how to fix this. Other than these mistakes your blog post is formatted rite and your sentences are informing. I also love love love your chevron background, keep up the good work.

C4C#3
Sarah Barnett's Blog Post
I critiqued Sarah's blog post #3 about peer editing, and below are some of the comments that I left on her blog. Hopefully she will take my comments seriously and apply them to her future work.

Sarah's Sentence: Peer editing is something that is so important in school these days.
*You should explain why you think its important, don't just state this as an open opinion, have something to back it up.

Sarah's Sentence: We should and will all benefit from these examples.
*You need more depth in your sentences, without the prior sentence this makes no sense.
*Also your picture doesn't have a link, wherever you got this picture you should copy and paste the link into your blog, (Not Google..an actual website or blog) so that when your cursor hovers over the picture the link will appear.
*You also do not have any links, you should have links in every single post. You can have a link to the video we watched and embed this into your paragraph.

Other than that your blog looks really good, I would just advise you to use more depth when writing.

C4C #2
Student: Caitlin Hinton
Link:Caitlin's Blog

This is what I said:
 "Mr.Dancealot” is an exemplary video concerning how many teachers in today’s society give facts ***and/or*** opinions, expecting the student to take notes, study, and regurgitate what the student “learned” in class.

I don't think you should put a / between and/or..this is not formal writing. But I do agree completely with the sentence.

You also have this sentence:
This is applicable to any field of education.
* What is applicable? without the sentence before this makes no sense. Make sure you include precisely what you are trying to say.

Your pictures and links look great, also your paragraphs were thought out very well. I would watch out for the dashes mid sentence because it throws everything off.

C4C #1
Student: Carla Young
Blog:Carla Young's Blog

The first thing that I noticed on your blog is that you do not have working links on your post. Also you do not have your pictures correctly done either. When you hover your mouse over your pictures it should show a direct link of where you copied the picture from. The links should not be Google, it needs to be a specific sight or blog. You can also go to the class blog and see in blog post assignments it shows you step by step how to add pictures and links into your blog.